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=Juan Pérez - Writing - Teens X = = = 

**Task N° 1: Article**

Fame and love for people are a combination of attributes few possess. To impact human life in a positive manner using your fame is truly an outstanding achievement a human can achieve.

The person possessing these attributes is cyclist Neil Armstrong. He has overcome trials and tribulations in his life; like his battle with cancer, to become the best at what he does. Also, he has shown as that a strong will and dedication can help us over come any obstacles life might present us with. He has taught us never to surcome to hardship, but to fight it and reach towards glory.

I think my fellow students will approve my choice based on what I have just said. Additionally, they know how many lives has been positively influenced by his efforts. Im sure everyone would be honoured to hear him speak.

**Teacher's feedback:**  Great article, Juan! It's very well-organised and interesting to read. You've used complex structures and vocabulary. However, pay attention to the following: - Title: Have you included one? - Spelling: Check lines 4 for two spelling errors. - Prepositions: A preposition is missing in lune 6. - Verb tense: Are you sure the verb //has// (line 6) is correct? Isn't //lives// plural? - (Etc)

(Then Juan Pérez will write a **second draft**, which should also have your comments/feedback. He could comment on his classmates' articles by writing a short comment either **after** the task or in the **discussion tab** above).